如何提高雅思G类写作 书信篇

如何提高雅思G类写作 书信篇

如何提升雅思G类(General Training)书信部分的写作表现?今天,就针对这个问题做一个详细的解答,希望能够帮助到更多的雅思烤鸭们。

在雅思培训类写作的Task 1当中,你需要写一封信件,信件的文体要么是正式的(formal),要么是非正式(informal)的(有的时候也可能是半正式的,我们通常叫semi-formal)。信件的aims主要取决于当时你考到的书信题目以及所给出了三个要点。这些要点包括了书信中要呈现的内容。

如何提升雅思G类写作呢?

下面,整理出一篇考生的书信答案让大家瞧瞧,大家也可以通过留言的方式来说说你对这篇书信文章的感受。

当时雅思官方出的书信题目如下:

You ordered a book online for exam preparation. It has been some time since you ordered it and you still have not received your book. Write a letter to the e-commerce company about this.

  • describe your purchase order of the book
  • explain the importance of the book
  • say what you want the company to do for you

大家可以先看看如上的题目并思考一下如何谋篇布局,然后我们来看看一位考生的作答,在看考生的答案的同时,大家可以不妨思考如下两个问题:

  1. 这封信件是否涵盖了所有要求的信息?
  2. 所要表达的信息是否合理整理成段落的形式?

考生的答案:

Dear sir,

I am writing this letter to inform you about my order of a book from your company on 20th march and my order number is AZ45543 which i have not received yet.

I am preparing for IAS exam for which i ordered a book Gerneral Studies Manual by Manohar Sharma. It is the best book for preparing for this exam.. and i only got it on amazon and was out of stock from other sites.

After checking the delivery time in 5 days i ordered this book becuase my exam is on 15th April. It’s already been more than 10 days and i did not received my order yet. This delay impacted my prepartion and I left with few days to study. I believe I can not make up for the lost time.

Since you have wasted one week of delivery I request you to refund me for the book and courier charges if I will not get the delivery in 2 days. As it it hard to cover for the gone time but I am a regular customer and this is the first time i had to face this problem so I will wait for 2 more days.

I hope to hear a positive reply.

Yours sincerely

David Smith

怎么提高雅思书信?

有关这篇书信文章的不足之处:

1. 虽然整个书信的任务是完成了,但是有点太长了。整个书信用词有211个。并不是说长了不好,而是说太过冗长不会对书信的分数有帮助,因为写得越长会导致文章的focus不够,也会生出很多不必要的细节出来。整个task 1占整个写作分值的33%。请保持书信文章的长度在170到190个词样子,然后就转向task 2的写作。

2. 书信的开头还口语。对于正式写作来说,开头句就应该体现信件的目的。这封信件不是为了告诉他人一些事情,而是要投诉或者表达不满。所以,意图基本合格了。

3. 除此之外,开头句最好只包含信件的main aim,不必给出细节部分。而这篇文章的开头句以及给出了一些细节,提醒烤鸭们不妨把这些细节挪动到主体段中。

4. 这篇文章的结构问题比较严重。有三个要点,每个要点有一个主体段。你需要学会组织你的语言并合理分段。

主体段1:购买的订单。给出一些细节出来。在这封信中的主体段2里面就包含了这些细节了。所以,这个细节的顺序有点散乱,没有太合理分配。

主体段2:交代为什么这本书对你来说很重要。这封信里头仅仅包含了两个与之相关信息的句子。

主体段3:交代你已经采取了什么措施。这里需要简明交代。你需要立即拿到书籍还是需要退款。要在这里提醒大家此时使用的言语一定不能太生硬,要很有礼貌,当然语气也要很坚定。

5. 落款方便,这封信有点不太正确。如果你开头是Dear Sir这种的话,需要以Yours faithfully这样的形式结尾。如果你开头是Dear Mr Jones的话,结尾则是Yours sincerely.

范文:

Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter to complain about my order of a book from your company on 1st April which has not arrived.

My order number is AZ55434 and it was for a book entitled “General Studies Manual” by Manohar Sharma. It was the one which came with a CD and was priced at $16.88. The delivery was guaranteed to be only two days but so far I have waited nearly 2 weeks without receiving anything.

This book is essential to my studies in preparing for my IAS exam, which is only 1 week away. It is the only book that explains some of the key aspects of the exam and without it I will struggle to get the grades I need for my future goals.

If your company is unable to deliver the book within the next two days, I would like a full refund including the delivery costs.

I hope to hear from you on receipt of this letter as this situation must be urgently resolved.

Yours faithfully,

David Smith

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以上就是针对如何整体提升G类书信雅思的指导,希望烤鸭们能够多多练习,祝大家备考顺利!

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